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"O-oh my."

"It's very beautiful, isn't it?"

"Y-yes it is... I never imagined..."

Twilight and Luna were standing on the deck of the Ponyville Library. It was the middle of spring, and Winter Wrap Up had long past. The grass was growing and the flowers were blooming, adding a beautiful green hue to the world as Luna's moon shone brightly overhead in the dead of night. The temperature was warm and the air was muggy, but the sky remained crystal clear. The pair of them were looking through Twilight's largest telescope, which she had just set up the night before.

"Things are so much clearer with a bigger lens, don't you think?" asked Twilight.

"Definitely," replied Luna, her eye glued to the eyepiece, the telescope pointed low on the horizon. "What's this star called?"

"It's called Antares. It's a part of the constellation called Scorpio," said Twilight, looking at one of her books. Luna took her face away from the eyepiece finally, looking up at the sky itself. She stared in the direction of red star, the brightest one in the constellation, that continued to flicker different shades of red visible even to the naked eye.

"Does it always do that? I mean, how it shifts in colour constantly," asked Luna.

"As far as I know, it always has, since the very beginning. It's how most astronomers find Scorpio in the sky."

Luna continued to stare at intensely and curiously. She had never noticed it before, even in all of her time changing and perfecting the night sky so long ago. In the relatively short amount of time she had began doing astronomy with Twilight, she had started realizing that there was so much she didn't know about her own creation.

"Oh! There's something really interesting I want to show you before you go tonight!" Twilight began moving the telescope's orientation with her hooves, pointing it higher into the horizon. She fiddled with the viewfinder on the side, attempting to point it at a precise location. She then looked through the eyepiece, and then adjusted the telescope again. "A-ha, found it!" she exclaimed. "Although... it might be a little too dark to see on this particular telescope."

"Oh, let me see," replied Luna, trading places with Twilight. She looked through it again, squinting, trying to figure out what exactly she was seeing. "It's very... fuzzy."

"Yeah... I'm sorry, I wanted to show you something I remember seeing back in the big observatory in Canterlot. Unfortunately this telescope just isn't big enough to see it clearly. It'd need to be a lot brighter for this particular telescope to pick it up."

"What is it, exactly?" asked Luna, curiously.

"Well... nopony really knows. There's a few theories floating around, but as far as anypony can tell, it's sort of like a gigantic cluster of stars, very, very far away. They call it 'Andromeda.'"

"Andromeda..." Luna looked out into the night sky again, trying to see if she could spot it with her naked eye. She could only see the same fuzzy outline out of the corner of her eye that she had seen in the telescope. Oh, how she wished she could see it. It was just then when a thought occurred to her.

"T-Twilight."

"Yes, Luna?"

"If I... if I made it brighter, could we see it with this telescope?" asked Luna, turning towards her.

"W-well," replied Twilight, taken aback by Luna's question. She had never imagined Luna could do something like that, but it did, of course, make complete sense. "... well, yes, theoretically you could make it brighter, and then we'd be able to see it from here. Are you sure you can do that, though?"

"I haven't done it in a very long time, but... I made all of this, right? I can't imagine it'd be too difficult."

Twilight smiled. "Alright then. Give it a try, if you'd like. I can't wait to see what happens!"

Luna returned the unicorn's smile, then looked back to the night sky. She focused on where she had seen Andromeda, and closed her eyes, picturing it in her minds eye. Her horn began to glow with an odd type of brightness, as if it were moonlight itself. She didn't know what it looked like specifically, but she didn't need to. She only needed to command it to be brighter, and it would accommodate her desires. Suddenly, there was a large flash of energy from her horn, which shot up directly at Andromeda, lighting up the entire sky like a phosphorescent lake. The energy rippled across the sky, the stars gleaming and pulsating with waves of brilliant, pure light that could be seen through the entire sky. Luna opened her eyes finally, and the sight she saw nearly knocked her to the floor. A large, bright disk had appeared in the sky. It sparkled and filled the vista of the night, as if it was a cloud of innumerable stars, hovering in the abyss. It was so bright, so beautiful, and dwarfed everything else, short of the moon itself. There was not a sound to be heard from anywhere around them. They said nothing, only gasping and covering their mouths with their hooves in unison. The image of Andromeda burned itself into Luna's retina. Had she really made this all on her own? Twilight walked towards Luna and sat beside her, the two mares staring in awe at the galaxy, trying to take in everything.

"... a trillion stars," said Luna suddenly, after a few moments.

"W-what?"

A tear ran down Luna's cheek. She had never imagined that her night held such wonders. It was beyond her wildest dreams. "There's a trillion stars... I can see them all gleaming and shining. Every individual one. I... I made... all of that...?"

Twilight wasn't sure what to say. She looked at Luna, who was simply staring at her creation in a kind of wonder that Twilight had never seen in anypony before. Her mane glowed with the same soft hue as the stars above them, her eyes reflecting and absorbing the light of Andromeda. Twilight couldn't help but admire her once more.

"I made... all... of it?" repeated Luna.

"You made the entire night sky, Luna. All of this is you," replied Twilight, still in a state of mild shock. "It was seeing things like this as a young filly that made me fall in love with your night. I couldn't imagine anything else so beautiful."

Luna responded by resting her head against Twilight's, continuing to look up at the beautiful galaxy whose light displaced the entirety of the sky. Twilight leaned back against her in kind. "Thank you, Twilight," she said finally.

"There's no need to thank me. I didn't do anything."

"You've shown me who I am."

Twilight blushed. "I just showed you what was already there."

Luna smiled, nuzzling Twilight's neck with her muzzle, enjoying the warmth and Twilight's scent. It was one of her most favourite things to do in the world. There was nowhere else she felt this safe. "I would have never known myself if it weren't for you."

"I just wanted to show you what you've made, so you'd know how beautiful it is. That's all."

"And that's why you're wonderful, Twilight." Luna broke from the loving embrace, looking at Twilight, smiling and giggling to herself. Luna looked almost euphoric. Twilight loved seeing her so happy and calm. "I need to go home now, before it gets too late. Celestia and I are having some sister-time tomorrow. She even booked the whole evening off for me."

"I completely understand. I hope you two have great fun!"

"We will," said Luna, smiling sweetly again. She embraced the unicorn in a hug, and held her for as long as possible. Twilight returned it, smiling just as brightly. Luna then took a step back, a blush forming on her cheeks. "I had a wonderful time tonight, Twilight."

"I did too. The last few months have been wonderful. Would you like to do this again in a few days from now, on Thursday? Weather permitting, of course," replied Twilight.

"I'd love to!" exclaimed Luna, her eyes lighting up. She blushed even harder, looking up at Twilight in a slightly coy way. "Oh, and... Twilight...?"

Before Twilight could even utter a single syllable in response, Luna leaned in closer to the other mare. Twilight blushed bright red, her heart skipping a beat, as she felt Luna lay a soft, gentle, sweet kiss directly on her cheek. She then brought her lips to Twilight's ear and whispered, "Goodnight." Luna stepped back, smiling, and extended her wings, stretching them as wide as she could, and began flapping them, ascending off the viewing deck of the Ponyville Library. She looked tenderly at Twilight for a few moments, before launching herself high into the air in the direction of Canterlot, blending in and disappearing into the bright, starry night sky. Twilight could only sit there, stunned for a few moments, before coming back to her senses. Her heart was nearly leaping through her chest, its heartbeat pounding through her ears, having just been kissed for the first time in her life. But it took only one look back up at the night sky they had just shared, like so many times before, to make Twilight calm once more. She sighed, feeling that pure elation that she only felt when she was with the Princess of the Night - the night itself, personified. Twilight spoke softly into the heavens, closing her eyes, as if it were a private conversation only between her and Luna. And it was.

"I love you too, Luna."

THE END
Author Notes: [link]

Twilight ventures out into the mountains to see a once-in-a-lifetime event. Disappointed by her friends not coming with her, Twilight crosses paths with a kindred spirit.

V1.5

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borritoman357 Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
ALL THE FEELS, this honestly competes in my faves with the dawn of a new day series ooooh, i learned as of late from writers like you that this is my favorite genre, and you guys are what made it so!
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Brony2893 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
moar?
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DarkwingSnark Featured By Owner May 23, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This was perfect. It took just as much time as it needed, and the pacing was wonderful. And t ending even better. it's pure and sweet. Like a MLP pairing should be. I love it. :heart:
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bldvenking Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2012
is there more?
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SyrinKitty Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Nope!
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bldvenking Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2012
nope?
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SyrinKitty Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
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bldvenking Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2012
is there more?
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SyrinKitty Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Nopers!
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bldvenking Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2012
is there more?
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SyrinKitty Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Nopeity nope!
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Detah-Ramet Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2011
This was definitely a very sweet story, though personally, i have a distaste for Luna being an artist of the night sky. While it does explain her grief at no one appreciating her night absolutely screwing with her to the point of nightmare emerging, it really doesn't make sense, especially because, as it would appear, the royal family, specifically those in a role of ruler-ship, appear to be capable of amazing magic, possible because of them being alicorns, and because of this they appear to pass it down, from parent to child. This would explain the whole Luna being an artist and artistry of the sky and all that. But the problem is, all that it appears she really does, is raise the moon. That is all. I know that im not really explaining this properly, but its just that Luna really doesn't work, in my opinion, as an artist all that well, as the royal alicorns seem to just manipulate large entities with their magic as their primary feature. Maybe im just being petty, i don't know. Still, it killed some time and was a sweet story.
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wlfnbane Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Wow... one of the best-written fanfics I've read... Bravo
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Nacholumrun Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2011  Hobbyist Filmographer
Dawwwwwww HNNNGGG *dead from the cuteness*

+1 cookie for you, great fic tomorrow im going to read Fragments, but i have seen that EqD tagged Fragments like

"Shipping, Sad, Slightly Dark", so it is a Sad End D:?!

I was giggling trought "I love you too, Luna" part

+1 another cookie for you
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AwzyKitsune Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Aww, such a sweet story. It brought tears to my eyes ^^
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tiepilot789 Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2011
This story was excellent!! The amount of work that must have gone into it must have been staggering. Thank you so much!!!
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LongshotLink Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2011
"There's no need to thank me. I didn't do anything."
"You've shown me who I am."
Twilight blushed. "I just showed you what was already there."


This was my favorite part. Loved it. And this whole story is so cute, it makes me grin happily. Thanks for writing this. I'll have to check out the sequel.
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lollipopbrowser Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2011
One day, I want have a folder called "The essential Tome of Equestrian romance", and this would be the story i would want to choose to represent Twilight and Luna pairings. very well-composed.
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SyrinKitty Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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SomethingVeryWitty Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Nomnomnomnomnom.
it's like a sandwich made of story.
a REALLY GOOD sandvich.
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Azdgari Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011
Lovely. Stylish, cohesive writing, perfect characterization, and a heart melting story. Three cheers!

Meaning, I read your story and I loved it. What more can I say? <3
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ArtWithoutPrediction Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Professional Artist
This is really romantic.
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MerC312 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is really beautiful, the fact that its only got a [shipping] tag is a conspiracy in itself. You've brought out Luna and Twilight so much the rest of the mane 6 seem to be intrusive to the story lines.

5/5

Heres to hoping Fragments is just as good! ^^
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Hakuisthebest Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Where can I find Fragments, please?
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MagicaITrevor Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
And with that, you've captured the pure essence of both characters perfectly... If it wasn't midnight, and my mind completely hazy from fatigue, and my eyes being so very tired, I'd probably be sobbing like a little girl right now... (Not that there's anything wrong with that! Just an expression.)
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ElrondS Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2011  Student Photographer
Im really speachless after reading this! Great job and cant wait for your next Fanfic!
5/5
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Tsukamoto-San Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2011  Student Digital Artist
I.. I can't even begin to describe how wonderful this story has been. Not only is this incredibly well written, but you manage to portray this wonderful sense of vulnerability and tenderness in the characters that made me instantly connect to both them and the story. More than just well-written, this story is emotionally moving. Consider me moved.

Also TwilightxLuna is now my fav pairing, so thanks for that, too :D
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fireflyfan Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2011
OK I'm going to keep this short....

BEST DAMN story about ponies ever...
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TheCrackerBrony Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2011
Omg
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ZeldaFan777 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2011
A truly wonderful way to end your grand story. The ending was so wonderful, just like I was expecting. I just love how sutle you were with your shipping, I really dont care for that just go for the striahg "I LOVE YOU" story, or going 'into detail'

You write and make it so natural. I cant wait to see what youll write next. Along with l0x0r, who is writing the over fantastic story, "Dont let the Sun catch you crying", you two are my favorite writers thus far, and anticipate your next story as I do the second season of MLP.

Cheers my good man, Fav'd and watched.
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Ziddia Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
6/5. Absolutely. I love this so much :)
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CTOONfan1 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2011
That was absolutely beautiful. I found myself glued to every word of this story, and this ending was the perfect way to close it. Absolutely deserves the 6-star rating on Equestria Daily. Great job!
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scorch238 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2011
The synthetic fabric of the tent slithers in tiny buzzing symphony, conducted by the same playful breeze of the desert night. Ensconced in warmth, face exposed to the chill of the world asleep, I close my eyes and drift into silent and murky dreams.

Still air, still mind, still body, still dreams, and still I would trade it for nothing in this world.

With silken tread, I withdraw. Tomorrow begins adventure anew.
I go now to taste it in my dreams...
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Drako013 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2011
Absolutely loved this short series. Full of emotion and heart. Amazing job.
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ltwinters30 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2011
this was a great story. once i started i couldn't stop at any point and i needed to go until i finished it. :) a great heart warming story
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madman12000 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2011
Great story, stayed up till 430am to finish it. Can't wait to read more from you, hope we get a sequel in the future.
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Adam123453 Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2011
This is the best thing I have ever read anywhere ever. Thank you for this. This whole story relates to me so much. This truly is amazing...


Thank you.
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SyrinKitty Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome! Had an amazing time writing this, and the response has been wonderful!

I'm glad you identified with Luna as well. Thank you!
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Dragonicblade Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2011
Wow, I actually did not expect that kiss and words of love. My heart skipped a beat when I read those words~ I rarely read fics but I think I already found the perfect MLP fic <3
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Paprika1 Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2011
nice
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Wabefuhon Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2011
This will make a great kids story. If I ever have kids, I'm reading this to them.
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TheDragonWarlock Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2011
Many thanks for this story. I enjoyed it. :love:
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weemadtommy Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2011
This is really good!
is there going to be more?
If so,CANT WAIT!! :3
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weemadtommy Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2011
D'AAAAAAAWWWWWW :3
:heart:
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doctordapples Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2011
It is ridiculous that more people haven't read this. It's fantastic.
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SyrinKitty Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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Baalthazzar Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2011
That story was so awfully sweet, I just had to read it all at once. I'm looking forward to your upcoming stories!
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Red-Medicine Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2011
Ah.... I love this. It's the sincerity of the innocent love found within these stories I love so much. Maybe that's why I love ship-fics so much when it comes to these ponies~
Gender really doesn't matter to me, so I don't get why some people get so huffy when they read shippings between the "mane" characters.
It's just.... ahhh! That beautiful purity of love you just don't see anymore in life, personified and revived through these characters, it almost brings tears to my eyes...

Anyways, your a fantastic writer, and I do hope from the bottom of my heart you will continue with not only this beautiful, wonderful particular story, but also to carry such voice and grace throughout any other works you may produce.
So from the bottom of my heart, Thank you for something so wonderful and touching to read~
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kyubi9432 Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2011
verry nice i really enjoyed reading these short stories and like your writing style. i hope to read more in the future.
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Zogger568 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011  Student Writer
I love this story. Are you planning on writing any more? I hope so, you're really good!
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